the patrick sponsor me video (not yet done, a "preview of sorts")

[kcirtap]

not the smoothest named thread, but here it is, the "beta version" of my sponsor me video for fight!

note:its not done yet, i will get better footage, and edit better (i now have vegas :D)

expect the final version to have big melons (lol), handrails, bigger stairs, more tech tricks, some lines, and not those two boardslides, more flip tricks, and of course, transition, tell me what you think, enjoy!
http://www.ramprage.com/forums/media/showphoto.php?photo=3753&cat=500&page=1

[-noxi-]

Less sketch for sure.

[SmaShitUp9]

Umm sorry dude I dont think you will get on the sponsered for a few reasons.

1. No style

2. You arnt going big at all

3. Too much park skating (most of the park skating wasn't good either)

4. Not enough stairs

5. I only saw 1 line (the crappy one at the begining)

I dont really know how good the Fight! team is but I have seen that one guy on there edward plozkia or something. hes 3 times better than you soo I dont think so sorry dude but keep skating and do this.

1.Take out the tricks where you jump off at the end cause they look horrible.

2. Get rid of the taildrop at the beggining

3. take out the crappy boardslides and the tre flip up the slightly slanted walkway.

4. Take your tres and do them off a nice ledge and/or over a gap

5. Find more street spots(stairs ledges ect)

6. Add in some fakie/nollie/switch tricks

and last land your tricks cleaner.

once you consider this you might just be sponsered soon.

[kcirtap]

i said i wasnt yet done, and tres offa stuff usually dont work for me, i was basically just mashing footage together, im not trying to get sponsored with this, this is somewhat of a start, but i gotta say, thanks for speaking your mind, i 'preciate it, id have a lotta stair stuff, but when im skating stairs i dont usually film, and the biggest set in this here town is about a 4 so i need to head to the city to get any decent stair footage, but just wait for the final version

[crazy_dave]

I thought it was pretty good. The filming was terrible though, really bad. Just skate some more street and vary your stance. Work on your steez too.

[kcirtap]

thanks dave, yeah me and my friends are a pretty small crew and we dont really have a filmer, we just kinda make-do, when i was skating i wasnt really thinking of getting sponsored, i was just skating around, and when i was editing i thought it looked pretty good so i made it a sponsor video, then after i got done i realized i needed better stuff, but i needed to post a video anyways

[FlashFlip]

i didnt even want to watch the whole video, let alone see you in a fight! promo

you need more practice and better filming, and bigger stuff and lots of others
Keep working

[just skate dude]

it was ok, work on your steez and NEED BETTER FLIMING

[kcirtap]

y'know looking back that DID kinda suck, dont worry though, when im done itll be WAY better everything is going to be bigger and re-filmed, any advice on what i can do to make my style look better? and waht can my filmers do to not suck so bad?

[ironicFate]

Keep working at it. Not good enough to be sponsored yet.

[McJesus]

Um The Pants Idk Just Wenr't Workin, Try To Go Off More Stairs

[shortty]

better filming for sure. and work on landing straight, most of the tricks sucked cause of the landing. more lines less park. GO BIG!!!

[SmaShitUp9]

For style just practise tricks landing over the bolts, rolling away smoothly

Make it look like your not even trying.

[Sk8 Or DiE]

Wow...So many negative replys.Personally..i thought it was half way decent.good enough to get sponsored?maybe by a shitty little shop.But not by Fight!..and your style does indeed need improvement.

[xdejaentendu187]

I thought it was pretty good. You need to go faster, though.

[Tilly&theOllie]

Okay but next time pick a better song, Taking Back Sunday sucks.

[kcirtap]

um, i like taking back sunday, and someone named "tilly" isnt going to change my views on music, any hows, i probly will use a different song on the final version, its probly not gonna be up for a while, i gotta get a LOT of stuff

[FIGHT!]

Why do people always bitch about music in vids? its totally a personal preference.

I'm not even going to watch the vid, I will wait for something official.

[chocolak]

i gotta say please fire the filmers get new ones or something that has to do with better filming and yes mr.fight i hate people like i hate that song get a new song or something its anoying

[Tilly&theOllie]

um, i like taking back sunday, and someone named "tilly" isnt going to change my views on music, any hows, i probly will use a different song on the final version, its probly not gonna be up for a while, i gotta get a LOT of stuff
Okay sorry I didn't think you would get so upset. I just don't like mainstream music all that much. Atleast you didn't chose something like Bombs Over Providence.

[AdioBird52]

That was pretty nice, but better style is definately needed.

You're definately a better skater than I am, keep it up!

[kcirtap]

thanks guys, and tilly, sorry for freaking out i was just a little tense, and Dan, thanks for holding out on me, by the time im done you wont be diassappointed, ive been widening my horizons of tricks, i definately got my crooks's down, ill work on my style and get my friends to film a little better, one of these days im gonna bring a friend and hit up three 8s (right in a row) a 10, some handrails, 6s and 7s, and then get all new GOOD park footage, but it probly wont be done for a whle because, as some of you know, im working on "low expectations" me and my pals' video, anyways thanks for saying nice things, and thanks for being mean but still giving me pointers, muchly appreciated

[McJesus]

hey man don't let these dudes get you disscouraged, you have a lot of time to get better

[moptopskate]

the army reserve called they want their pants back.

[SkaterBrett]

I would say that he got potential. He should just work on landing smoother and he will get sponsored.

[Miniflipkid]

honestly dude, that was some ugly skating

it's less that you didn't have a style, it seems like your style is just flat out a pain in the eyes to watch

just being brutally honest, not flaming you, just try to really work on that more than anything

[edward]

^psh what kind of loser steals someones totally kick ass avatar?

[Bakerbum211]

^^ yeah i agree edward

[Miniflipkid]

^psh what kind of loser steals someones totally kick ass avatar?


what're you gonna do?

beat me with a little stick?

don't bring this fight out of the Avatar Wars thread, we shouldn't be fighting here

[curlyy]

i agree with ed.

[SK8CE]

Umm sorry dude I dont think you will get on the sponsered for a few reasons.

1. No style

2. You arnt going big at all

3. Too much park skating (most of the park skating wasn't good either)

4. Not enough stairs

5. I only saw 1 line (the crappy one at the begining)

I dont really know how good the Fight! team is but I have seen that one guy on there edward plozkia or something. hes 3 times better than you soo I dont think so sorry dude but keep skating and do this.

1.Take out the tricks where you jump off at the end cause they look horrible.

2. Get rid of the taildrop at the beggining

3. take out the crappy boardslides and the tre flip up the slightly slanted walkway.

4. Take your tres and do them off a nice ledge and/or over a gap

5. Find more street spots(stairs ledges ect)

6. Add in some fakie/nollie/switch tricks

and last land your tricks cleaner.

once you consider this you might just be sponsered soon.
Hey he is probably a better skater than you!!"!

[flipsk8er1728]

Wow... I thought the replys would be better than this. I actually thought it was decent. maybe not enough to get sponsored but it was definately good for a shit video... keep working on your seed and steez.

[Koolaid]

Wow you guys arent even helping him for the most part your just being a$$holes

Oh dude your definatly good enough you just need to take out some of the stuff... your flips and grinds are AWESOME. But I think you should forget alot of the park skating... alot of thats pretty lame but dude I think your final version will definatly get you sponsored.

[kcirtap]

yeah, i dont mind the negativity, when i started editing this it was juust sposed to be a montage and i just kinda felt like making it into a sponsor me tape, i guess this isnt even really my sponsor me tape at all

[Mr.42]

Umm sorry dude I dont think you will get on the sponsered for a few reasons.

1. No style

2. You arnt going big at all

3. Too much park skating (most of the park skating wasn't good either)

4. Not enough stairs

5. I only saw 1 line (the crappy one at the begining)

I dont really know how good the Fight! team is but I have seen that one guy on there edward plozkia or something. hes 3 times better than you soo I dont think so sorry dude but keep skating and do this.

1.Take out the tricks where you jump off at the end cause they look horrible.

2. Get rid of the taildrop at the beggining

3. take out the crappy boardslides and the tre flip up the slightly slanted walkway.

4. Take your tres and do them off a nice ledge and/or over a gap

5. Find more street spots(stairs ledges ect)

6. Add in some fakie/nollie/switch tricks

and last land your tricks cleaner.

once you consider this you might just be sponsered soon.

That was way too brutal.

[kickflip10191]

pretty good- the kickflip fs board and kickflip 5050 were pretty nice- couple things tho- and someone might have said them already- just get more speed for things like the boardslide, and if u dont land clean dont put it in. Lastly, some of the lines were nice, but the way u kept messing with ur hair in the middle of each one kinda got annoying- just my own opinion- overall pretty decent :)

[kcirtap]

thanks dude, yeah, i wasnt really making this into a sponsor video, i was just stoked so i made it one, but yeah, the hair bit made me laugh, i got it cut though so its no longer a problem

[Ree123]

That was a nice camera tho just not a nice filmer.
Bend your knees more when you land and grind.
Making a video like this makes you look bad when your actually good.

[McJesus]

You guys are dicks, a lot of those tricks are hard, better style and you get a sponsor

[mcwattersm]

I realized that all critism is good critism may it be negitive or positive. I'm in the same boat as you Pat.

[kcirtap]

You guys are dicks, a lot of those tricks are hard, better style and you get a sponsor
whoa man, i really appreciate you sticking up for me and all, but dont call everyone dicks, thanks for being polite and a jerk at the same time (:

yeah matt, just wait and see though, cover of transworld "two long time RRers become pro for plan b or some wickedly awesome company" haha, just kidding of course

[bmmetcalf]

I didnt think it was bad at all. You could work on style and teach your camera man to get better but other than that it wasnt that bad.

[Apek~Dom]

Honestly the filming sucked and you needed improvement. but i'm 100% sure you're improving, can't wait for the complete video. keep improving and you'll get there.

[XBLinK182sk8rX]

I thought it was good, just need to work on that style. But I LOVED that kickflip 50-50. It looked perfect. Also, do things a little faster. Sometimes you did things so slow, it was kinda boring to me. But anyways, keep it up, you are a good skater, you just need to practice.

[almostsk8er33]

yeah i thought it was decent. maybe a shop but nothing more. make the video a little longer and give this guy 6 months and he will get a sponsor

[scarecrow476]

I thought the far away angle for the park was cool seemed really professional, but I usually don't notice filming so idk if the other parts were filmed bad or w/e.

[Seanie990]

your push is horrible, but,that being said, you are pretty damn good, and it looks like you pretty much know what you're doing. Work on your push,and you'll go alot faster, which will look a lot nicer. :-41: :-41: :-41:

[FlashFlip]

youre a good skater, but this video made you look like you didnt know wat you were doing. think about wat you are doing. make the filmer better or make someone else film it. it shouldnt be the filmers fault you didnt make FIGHT!

[kcirtap]

gosh, thanks guys, ive been working on my speed and i'll try to get a prettier push, i'll post sopme new footy soon so you guys can see my improvement

[Ramp]